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  1. The Final Exam was a really neat adaptation. If I wouldn't of read the author's note, I would've had no idea you were referencing The Odyssey. I feel like that is a pretty hefty task to take on and your spin on it is truly so unique (and relatable!!!) I also noticed little phrases throughout your story that referred back to the original. The old English phrases and details didn't go unnoticed!! I always feel like my stories seem chaotic, but like you said that's part of the process. What a relieving feeling it is walking out of your last final for the semester. It is such a distinct feeling and you illustrated the emotional rollercoaster of finals week + dead week perfectly. One suggestion I thought of is, is there anyway to add details about the classes and exams they are taking that may relate back to the original story? One student could be studying for Mythology, another studying for Geography(because cave)? I'm not sure how that could work out but it could be a moment for a little laugh!

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  2. Z, this is a very unorthodox rendition of the Odyssey; I've never read anything similar to this before! The one aspect that I enjoyed the most from your story was how it was very relatable during that time. However, something that I think you can add is more of a narrative on Cody, which I assume was the main character of the story. The reason why I think he deserves more context is that he was only introduced in the second to last paragraph of the story! However, I enjoyed the story overall. In terms of the portfolio website itself, I like the simplicity of and the color design of it. Nothing is too bright or contrastive to the surrounding elements, which is very nice! I would suggest thought that you add more pictures and/or descriptions that will make your portfolio look more crowded and exciting.

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  3. Z, your rendition of the Odessey is so cool. I can tell you put a lot of time into reading, and understanding the story before you wrote "The Final Exam." It is great that you used your creativity to turn this story into your own, and really made it unique. A lot of the stories I have read this year have clues or big details that give me a hint of what the story is based on, but this one had me stumped, which I loved! Great job on that story. The layout of your project is great, I think it looks really clean and I like how the comment wall is easily accessible on the very first page. The colors go together very well, and the title and images bring everything together and round it out. Really awesome job on all of this, I am looking forward to hopefully reading more of your stories during the second half of the semester!

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  4. Hey Z! Your retelling of the Odyssey is very unique! Students taking their finals are definitely a huge trial to overcome. I definitely see how it can be compared to a journey. They both take lots of preparation, and you just have to hope that you are ready for whatever comes your way. I think adding some people who failed and had to redo the year would add some tragic drama to the story. Your second story is also pretty cool. I like the analogy of a turtle coming out of their shell as the man gets more comfortable. I wonder how it would have gone if he had stayed humble though. I think maybe showing some more about how he became corrupted and greedy could really add to the story. Like maybe arguments between him and his friends, or how he came to leaving the other ice cream shop.

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  5. Hello Z!

    I remember reading your "Final Exam" story a while back and I'm glad to see you added it in your portfolio as well! I enjoyed looking at your portfolio, it is clean and simple and easy to navigate. I am a fan of less is more and that is certainly the case here. I loved reading your second story with Thertle (what a great name) and how he let his new fame get to him. I found myself getting angry at Thertle towards the end of the story as Miss Goose was the one who gave him chance in life and he ruined hers in return. I like how you kept the characters from the original story and changed their names just slightly in your new story, I thought it was a good touch and allows the readers to know who your are talking about. I cannot wait to read more stories from you, Let's have a great rest of our semester!

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  6. Hi Z!

    I love your stories. I think they are fun renditions of some older tales. The "Final Exam" story took me back in time. I was transported to last winter when I could barely feel my face after walking to the library to study for my test at 8 am the next morning. I would order my coffee and attempt to cram all of the information into one study session because I had just finished studying for my other test. This was creative and a fun way to connect with your readers. "The Prideful Man" was just as good! Although I do not have those similar experiences, I was put in the situation with the man. I wanted what was best for him and I wanted him to get what he wanted. I like that you didn't dwell on him being brought down because the one sentence made me understand all I needed to know!

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  7. Hi Z!
    The Final Exam was an interesting read! It for some reason made me feel like I was reading a Christmas adventure tale! I can definitely relate to the feelings the characters had about final exams! I did not quite get the connection with the Odyssey until I read the author's note, but I enjoyed the story! I loved The Prideful Man! It was told in a way that was easy to keep reading and I would have read more if there was more! I love that he realized his mistakes at the end also. I would love to read a backstory of Thertle, to see if this is a cycle he has been through before, or if he just had bad luck and blew his chance. Great job, I can't wait to see what you do next!

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  8. Hi Z, I was so excited when I got to your portfolio because I could just keep reading! I thoroughly enjoyed every version you had created though I had only read the first two before. The setup and layout of your portfolio is perfect and easy to guide through, I love that you named the turtle character Thertle, and I liked all of the images that you used. There were a few spelling mistakes that I saw but only because it was a different word used like group instead of grew in the last story. I now want to go back and read the Supernatural story because it was kind of hard for me to follow but I understood your version. Your versions were very creative and I like that thought outside of the box for them, I have trouble changing some stories to modernize them and you did it really well.

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